1. Writing Expository Introductions A successful introduction should Be brief HOOK the reader’s interest Include a THESIS STATEMENT

2. HOOK Strategies (choose one) Lively Description – Imagery Funnel Quotation Turnabout

3. Lively Description - Imagery Use sensory details and figurative language to add interest to an introduction. Paint a picture and establish the mood of the essay.

4. Lively Description – Imagery In August 1883, Krakatoa volcano in Indonesia erupted. It was a big eruption, and many people died as a result. It had been rumbling and smoking for months, but no one expected such a violent explosion. Then, on August 27 and 28, 1883, a thunderous eruption blew the island apart and took the lives of more than 36,000 people. The eruption of Krakatoa, a volcanic island in Indonesia, was one of the most violent natural events ever witnessed by humans.

5. Funnel Reveals background information leading to a focused thesis statement. Example: Birds, horses, rats and other animals all have special talents which have been used by humans. However, no animal has quite as many special talents as dogs.

6. Quotation Uses a quote to lead to the thesis statement Can lead impact and lend authority Example: “Never trust a man a dog doesn’t like,” the proverb says. This somehow implies that dogs can tell the character of a person before a human can. In many ways this is true.

7. Turnabout Starts with the opposite idea and then moves to the focus Example: Dogs are cute, smart, and loyal. However, dogs can have annoying habits.

8. A Thesis Statement contains the main idea or message of a composition. is usually one sentence is a statement, not a question identifies the subject of the essay or composition takes a stand rather than simply announcing a subject is narrow and specific enough to be fully supported

9. Which of these sentences are successful thesis statements? Wolves have an impressive variety of communication abilities, including visual signals with ears and tails and howling and other vocalizations. Each wolf pack is led by two individuals. Today, because of habitat destruction and excessive hunting, wolves live in only a portion of their former range. Wolves have an interesting history.

10. Which of these sentences are successful thesis statements? Wolves have an impressive variety of communication abilities, including visual signals with ears and tails and howling and other vocalizations. Today, because of habitat destruction and excessive hunting, wolves live in only a portion of their former range.

11. Wordiness When you write thesis sentences, you should avoid the following common errors. MENUEXIT Thesis Statements When you revise your writing, be sure your thesis statement is as strong as it should be. Simple statements of fact Simple announcements Broad, general opinions

12. Wordiness MENUEXIT Simple Statements of Fact Statements of fact cannot be thesis statements because they do not take a position or suggest a direction for the writing. Thesis Statements Continue…

13. Wordiness MENUEXIT Simple Statements of Fact How would you change this statement of fact into a thesis? The pioneers on the Oregon trail faced many hardships. Click to see a revision Thesis Statements PREVIOUS Statements of fact cannot be thesis statements because they do not take a position or suggest a direction for the writing.

14. Wordiness MENUEXIT Simple Statements of Fact The revised thesis expresses an opinion about the topic, rather than just stating a fact. It also previews the main ideas of the essay. The pioneers on the Oregon Trail faced many hardships. ORIGINAL REVISED The pioneers on the Oregon Trail bravely faced many hardships, including disease, terrible weather, accidents, hunger, and thirst. Menu Thesis Statements PREVIOUS Statements of fact cannot be thesis statements because they do not take a position or suggest a direction for the writing.

15. Wordiness MENUEXIT Simple Announcements A simple announcement doesn’t express a point of view or preview the main ideas of the composition. Thesis Statements Continue…

16. Wordiness MENUEXIT Simple Announcements How would you rewrite this statement to make it an effective thesis? In the following paper, I am going to write about impressionist painting. Click to see a revision Thesis Statements PREVIOUS A simple announcement doesn’t express a point of view or preview the main ideas of the composition.

17. Wordiness MENUEXIT Simple Announcements This revised thesis expresses a point of view and previews the main ideas. It does not mention the paper and avoids the first person reference. Two of the greatest techniques developed by impressionist painters were loose brushwork and the use of brilliant color. Thesis Statements Menu PREVIOUS A simple announcement doesn’t express a point of view or preview the main ideas of the composition.

18. Wordiness MENUEXIT Broad, General Opinions The statement of an opinion should be specific and narrow enough to be fully supported. Thesis Statements Continue…

19. Wordiness MENUEXIT Thesis Statements How would you revise this broad statement? The melting of the Artic ice cap is an environmental disaster. Broad, General Opinions Click to see a revision PREVIOUS The statement of an opinion should be specific and narrow enough to be fully supported.

20. Wordiness MENUEXIT Broad, General Opinions Thesis Statements How would you revise this broad statement? The melting of the Artic ice cap is an environmental disaster. The statement of an opinion should be specific and narrow enough to be fully supported.

21. WordinessThesis Statements MENUEXIT Broad, General Opinions The melting of the Artic ice cap is an environmental disaster.. The statement of an opinion should be specific and narrow enough to be fully supported. The melting of the Artic ice cap is an environmental disaster.

22. Wordiness MENUEXIT Broad, General Opinions Thesis Statements The melting of the Artic ice cap The statement of an opinion should be specific and narrow enough to be fully supported.

23. Wordiness MENUEXIT Broad, General Opinions Thesis Statements The statement of an opinion should be specific and narrow enough to be fully supported. will affect not only the animals and people in the Artic region but also weather patterns and coastlines worldwide. The tragic melting of the Artic ice cap

24. Wordiness MENUEXIT Broad, General Opinions This thesis statement gives specific reasons that can be supported with evidence. Thesis Statements Menu PREVIOUS The statement of an opinion should be specific and narrow enough to be fully supported. will affect not only the animals and people in the Artic region but also weather patterns and coastlines worldwide. The tragic melting of the Artic ice cap