1. Focused Editing

2. The Usual Suspects Comma Splices cs What are they? What are they? How do you look for them? How do you look for them? I decided to read the poem again, the second reading confirmed my suspicion that the speaker was female.

3. I decided to read the poem again; the second reading confirmed my suspicion that the speaker was female. I decided to read the poem again, and the second reading confirmed my suspicion that the speaker was female.

4. Fragments frag What are they? What are they? How do you look for them? How do you look for them? I hadn’t noticed how Olds used the word “scar” to describe the young man’s shoelaces. Even though I’d read the poem many times. The Usual Suspects

5. I hadn’t noticed how Olds used the word “scar” to describe the young man’s shoelaces. Even though I’d read the poem many times. Tricky Starts: Although Although Even though Even though Because Because Since Since While While

6. I hadn’t noticed how Olds used the word “scar” to describe the young man’s shoelaces, even though I’d read the poem many times. Even though I’d already read the poem many times, I hadn’t noticed how Olds used the word “scar” to describe the young man’s shoelaces.

7. The Usual Suspects Easily-Confused Words to, two, too were, where your, you’re there, their, they’re its, it’s could of, should of, would of could have, should have, would have

8. The Usual Suspects Commas around Essential Clauses, What are they? What are they? How do you look for them? How do you look for them? The poem, that I analyzed for the essay, was Sharon Olds’ “On the Subway.” Olds’ poem, “On the Subway,” is about a woman considering the politics of race.

9. The poem, that I analyzed for the essay, was Sharon Olds’ “On the Subway.” Olds’ poem, “On the Subway,” is about a woman considering the politics of race.

10. –Olds provides us with no access to the thoughts of the “boy,” who wears his shoelaces like “intentional scars.”