1. Ready, Set, Guess the problem!
WRITING
Ready, Set, Guess the problem!

2. BEFORE WRITING THE EMAIL
Make a plan!
Think about the purpose of the
Think about the person who will read the and how you want him or her to react
Make an outline or list of the main points and details you want to include in the
Double check any facts, dates, times, or other specific details that will be included in the

3. THINGS TO CONSIDER WHEN DOING BUSINESS CORRESPONDENCE

4. Who are you writing to and what is your relationship with the person?
If the person you are writing to is in a higher position than you, your should use more formal language than if the person is someone in the same level position than you.
If you have never met the person receiving your before, you should use formal language in the first to him or her.
Once you have sent the first and received a reply, you can choose to continue using formal language or choose to use less formal language in future s.

5. WHAT IS THE SITUATION?
Think about the reason you are sending the and decide if formal or informal language is better.
If you are requesting a service or asking a favor, you should use formal language.
If you are making a complaint, you should use strong words to express your dissatisfaction or problem but you must be polite.
If you are introducing yourself, you should use formal language but you can use words or phrases that let your personality show through as well.
If you are writing a customer relation letter, you should use formal language.

6. WHAT DO YOU WANT TO ACCOMPLISH?
Think about the reason for writing the and what you want the person who receives the to do with it.
If you want the receiver to do something for you, make it clear. Tell the receiver exactly what action you want done.
Tell the receiver if no action needs to be taken.
If you want the receiver to respond by a certain date, write the response date.
If you are negotiating or rearranging a meeting, write your demands or available times clearly.

7. Some things to remember when writing business emails

8. GET RIGHT TO THE POINT
Don’t use unnecessary words and phrases that distract from the main idea of the or may confuse the reader
The person reading your does not have a lot of time to read your so you must make it as direct as possible.
Make the reason for writing the clear at the beginning and only add details that are directly related to the topic of the .

9. USE SIMPLE SENTENCES
Avoiding difficult or complex sentence structures will help you avoid grammatical mistakes.
Simple sentences will make the easier for your reader to understand, especially if the person reading the is not a native English speaker.

10. PAY ATTENTION TO WORD CHOICE
Remember that writing is a form of indirect communication. Unlike having a conversation with someone, you do not have a chance to clarify yourself by restating your ideas or use nonverbal cues to make your meaning clear. You have to make sure your reader understands what you want to say and gets the right “message” the first time.

11. Think about how the email might be perceived by the reader
Think about how the might be perceived by the reader. Are there any words or phrases that may make the tone seem angry, flippant or disrespectful?
Avoid trying to make a joke or say something funny in an . Sometimes what you think is funny might be misunderstood by the reader and create a bad relationship.
Use words that are specifically related to the topic but define any words or phrases that you think the reader might not be familiar with, especially words that are specific to a certain type of job, field of study or product.

12. THE SUBJECT OF THE EMAIL
Always write the subject of the on the subject line
Remember that business people often receive hundreds of s every day. If you don’t write the subject in the subject line the person receiving the might think it is SPAM or junk and delete the message. If the subject isn’t clear they might delete the as well, so make sure the subject is direct-don’t use too many words.

13. THE FOUR PARTS OF A BUSINESS EMAIL
The Opening
Tells the reader why you are writing
The Focus
Tells the details about the topic
The Action
Tells what you want to happen and gives a time frame
The Closing
Thank the reader and mention future communication

14. BASIC FORMAT

15. The receiver’s email address
Carbon copy
Blind carbon copy
subject

16.
July 5 meeting time change

17. Type your message in the text box, then click send and it will be sent to the receivers you have indicated in the to, Cc, and Bcc areas.

18. ETIQUETTE
This presentation was designed in response to the growing popularity of and the subsequent need for information on how to craft appropriate messages, send resumes and cover letters via , communicate with colleagues and classmates, and how to participate in electronic mailing lists. Anyone who uses (regardless of regularity or purpose) will find this workshop to be useful.
Contributions from the following sources:
Angell, David, and Heslop, Brent. The Elements of Style: Communicate Effectively via
Electronic Mail. Reading, Mass: Addison-Wesley Publishing Company, 1994.
Bailey, Jr., Edward P. The Plain English Approach to Business Writing. New York: University Press, 1990.
Caudron, Shari. “Virtual Manners.” Workforce 79.2 (2000):

19. WHY IS EMAIL ETIQUETTE IMPORTANT?
We all interact with the printed word as though it has a personality and that personality makes positive and negative impressions upon us.
Without immediate feedback your document can easily be misinterpreted by your reader, so it is crucial that you follow the basic rules of etiquette to construct an appropriate tone.
has become very prevalent in most people’s lives and many use it to cheaply and quickly communicate with friends, family, and co-workers. Although this technology is available to everyone, and most people are accustomed to using , people still are not very savvy when it comes to understanding how functions in a relationship both personally and professionally.
How we interpret While most people are aware that the computer is not a person and that s do not have a character of their own, many people still react to them as though they do. Readers assign meaning to everything that people write and tend to perceive it as concrete because it is in black and white (or whatever color you may choose). This response, coupled with a lack of nonverbal cues, poses a serious challenge for writers. It is easy for s to be misinterpreted because people write as though they are having a conversation; however, the receiver does not read that way.
Ask the audience: How many times have you received an and felt a little put off by the message even though it was from a good friend? Have you ever sent an that upset or confused someone? What was it like to be in that situation and what did you do to clear up the misunderstanding? It is because of these uncomfortable situations that some ground rules on etiquette were established and why writers should be mindful of them.

20. THE ELEMENTS OF EMAIL ETIQUETTE
General format
Writing long messages
Attachments
The curse of surprises
Flaming
Delivering information
Delivering bad news
Electronic Mailing Lists
This slide provides an overview of the entire workshop. Workshop participants will benefit from information on the general format of writing, content development, and tips on how to use electronic mailing lists.

21. GENERAL FORMAT: THE BASICS
Write a salutation for each new subject .
Try to keep the brief (one screen length).
Return s within the same time you would a phone call.
Check for punctuation, spelling, and grammatical errors
Use caps only when appropriate.
Format your for plain text rather than HTML.
Use a font that has a professional or neutral look.
Many complain that writers of do not take the time to be personable. One way to remedy this and extend good will toward the reader is to add a salutation for each new subject. “Dear,” “Hello,” and “Hi” are all acceptable greetings. If a writer is communicating with someone about the same subject (for example, authorization for overtime) then it is considered acceptable to just begin the with the first sentence.
Length: A number of experts have a wide range of opinions on how lengthy an should be. Some say that it does not matter and others say that an should be as long as the text box without scrolling. Both perspectives appear to be correct. In general s should be short and to the point. However, many companies are moving to paperless memos and other written transactions, thereby requiring that s be longer. This workshop is going to cover how to effectively write a long on slide #11 titled “When Your Message is Long.”
Time: It is considered rude not to respond to an as soon as possible. Writers should strive to respond to s as quickly as they would a phone message, which tends to be immediately. If the requires a longer message than the writer is able to provide at that moment, it is considered proper etiquette to let the sender know that the message was received and that the writer is planning to respond as soon as time permits.
Grammar and Punctuation: For the professional work world it is imperative that writers use capitalization, grammar, and other traditional ways of writing to include neutral fonts.
Plain Text vs. HTML: Not all s are formatted to read html. It is best to send everything in plain text unless the writer knows for certain that the person he or she is writing can read html.

22. GENERAL FORMAT: CHARACTER SPACING
Try to keep your line length at 80 characters or less.
If your message is likely to be forwarded, keep it to 60 characters or less.
Set your preferences to automatically wrap outgoing plain text messages.

23. GENERAL FORMAT: LISTS AND BULLETS
When you are writing directions or want to emphasise important points, number your directions or bullet your main points.
For example,
Place the paper in drawer A.
Click the green “start” button.
Another example,
Improve customer satisfaction.
Empower employees.
Mouse-click to activate text
Explanation: This is one of many ways to organize information within an document. It’s an effective way to make the information flow more logically and it helps the reader to know the proper order of the information in the in a very clear and concise way.
*Angell and Heslop

24. Write in a positive tone
GENERAL FORMAT: TONE
Write in a positive tone
“When you complete the report.” instead of “If you complete the report.”
Avoid negative words that begin with “un, non, “ex” or that end with “less” (useless, non-existent, ex-employee, undecided).
Use contractions to add a friendly tone.
(don’t, won’t, can’t).
Explanation: The main point of this slide is to help participates understand the importance of tone. These are ways to create a document that sounds friendly and “nonverbally” open. While it is important to follow rules of punctuation and grammar in , using contractions can create a conversational style that isn’t intimidating.
Remind students that tone is dependent on audience -- an to a co-worker might have a substantially different tone than to a boss. Ask them to think about situations and determine appropriate tones for them.
*Angell and Heslop

25. ATTACHMENTS
When you are sending an attachment tell your respondent what the name of the file is, what program it is saved in, and the version of the program.
“This file is in MSWord under the name “LabFile.”
Explanation: Attachments can sometimes cause more headaches than help, and it can be difficult for the recipient(s) to figure out why they are unable to download an attachment. One way to help is to provide all of the important information about the file so that the recipient can trouble shoot to something more serious if there is a problem other than incompatibility.
Also, due to viruses that spread via attachments, it’s important that the recipient know that the sender meant for an attachment to be included with the message, and what kind of attachment it is, since opening unknown attachments could cause serious damage to the recipient’s system and spread viruses further. Always check any attachments you are going to send for viruses, and never open unknown attachments!

26. WHEN YOUR MESSAGE IS LONG
Create an “elevator” summary.
Provide a table of contents on the first screen of your .
If you require a response from the reader then be sure to request that response in the first paragraph of your .
Create headings for each major section.
Mouse-click to activate text
Elevator Summary: Business experts often refer to this kind of summary either as an elevator summary or an executive summary. Either terminology is correct. An elevator summary is a summary that can be given to a colleague or employer in the short time it takes to get from the ground floor to the third floor on an elevator. It has the bare essentials of the message.
*Angell and Heslop
Why a summary? We all know what it is like to inundated with , so much so that is difficult to figure out what s have priority over others. If there is a brief summary at the top readers can make a decision about whether to save the for later or finish it at that time.
The table of contents: The table of contents is a very friendly gesture toward readers when they are required to read long messages. It allows them to skip to the sections of the that apply to them and avoid those areas that do not.
Other explanations: If the reader needs to respond immediately to the then that should be conveyed in the first paragraph; otherwise, that message may be overlooked and the writer will not receive the response as quickly as one is needed.

27. ELEVATOR SUMMARY AND TABLE OF CONTENTS
An elevator summary should have all the main components of the .
“Our profit margin for the last quarter went down 5%. As a result I am proposing budget adjustment for the following areas…”
Table of contents
“This contains
A. Budget projections for the last quarter
B. Actual performance for the last quarter
C. Adjustment proposal
D. Projected profitability”
Elevator summary activated by mouse-click, table of contents loads automatically
Sample: This slide shows examples of the elevator summary and the table of contents.
*Angell and Heslop

28. DELIVERING INFORMATION ABOUT MEETINGS, ORIENTATIONS, PROCESSES
Include an elevator summary and table of contents with headings.
Provide as much information as possible.
Offer the reader an opportunity to receive the information via mail if the is too confusing.
Explanation: Many companies, in an effort to save on paper, are sending vital information through about their conferences, corporate orientations, and new policies and procedures.
Most likely, new employees will be easily frustrated and confused, so providing information about orientations should be detailed and organized. The more information that is included in the the less likely the composer will have to fax or mail a document.
The same is true for meetings and for policy changes.

29. DELIVERING BAD NEWS Deliver the news up front.
Avoid blaming statements.
Avoid hedging words or words that sound ambiguous.
Maintain a positive resolve.
Mouse-click to activate text
Explanation: There is a myth that continues to circulate that the more a person stalls in getting bad news out the better the recipient will feel about it because he or she will be prepared. THIS IS NOT TRUE. In fact, stalling or beating around the bush only leads to reader frustration and may not serve the messenger well if he or she is writing the to their boss.
It is better to deliver bad news up front in the elevator summary.

30. Deliver the news up front:
DELIVERING BAD NEWS
Deliver the news up front:
“We are unable to order new computers this quarter due to budget cuts.”
Avoid blaming:
“I think it will be hard to recover from this, but what can I do to help?”
Avoid using “weasel words” or hedging:
“Our pricing structure is outdated.”
More examples of hedging are:
Intents and purposes
Possibly, most likely
Perhaps, maybe
Mouse-click to activate text
Explanation: This slide provides examples of poor choices for prioritizing information and shows ways to construct messages that are not blaming or ambiguous.
The term “weasel words” was coined by Angell and Heslop to describe words that appear cowardly, ambiguous, or indirect in an effort to ward off or stall potentially negative repercussions.

31. Explain the attempts you made previously to resolve the problem.
WRITING A COMPLAINT
You should briefly state the history of the problem to provide context for your reader.
Explain the attempts you made previously to resolve the problem.
Show why it is critical for the problem to be resolved by your reader.
Offer suggestions on ways you think it can be resolved or how you are willing to help in the matter.
Mouse-click to activate text
Explanation: When writing a complaint via the writer should provide a very clear picture for the recipient mainly because there is a tremendous amount of room for misinterpretation or misunderstanding. It is important that the writer provide a context and state clearly what the problem is and how he or she would like to see the problem resolved.
Reminder: Remind the participants that if the problem is urgent, they should indicate that in their elevator summary and let the recipient know they need a response as soon as possible.

32. Briefly state the history:
WRITING A COMPLAINT
Briefly state the history:
“The current way we choose officers for our organisation is not democratic. As a result, we have a popularity contest that does not always get us the best candidates.”
Show attempts made by you thus far to resolve the issue:
“I have offered two alternatives for officer selection that still involves the votes of the members but both have been rejected by the executive board.”
Mouse-click to activate text
Explanation: These are the first two steps one can take in writing a complaint. It is important for the writer to provide a context for his or her audience and to show the audience that he or she has taken all the necessary and required steps to resolve it. When a person takes the time to show that she or he is contributing to the solution the message takes on a positive tone that is generally received with greater ease and optimism by the audience.

33. WRITING A COMPLAINT
Show why it is important for your reader to get involved:
“This is a problem for two reasons. First, I am concerned that the executive board no longer protects the interests of the organisation and that their actions are not in keeping with the constitution of the organisation.
Second, there have been a number of complaints from the members who feel that their concerns and preferences are not being addressed by the executive board, which decreases morale and productivity.”
Explanation: Everyone does not agrees on what is considered to be a “problem.” When writers clearly state what they perceive to be troublesome it reduces the possibility of disagreement between them and their audience. Labeling something as a “problem” is not sufficient enough to motivate others to act. The problem must be clearly defined in a way that can foster solutions.

34. WRITING A COMPLAINT Ask for help and offer a resolution:
“Please let me know what other options I may have overlooked. I am willing to meet with the department head and the executive board to seek out a solution that is fair to the members and is good for the business of the organisation. ”
Explanation: Most often when people receive complaints the natural reaction is to ask “so how does this involve me?” It is vital that writers prescribe courses of action to motivate their audience. First, writers should concede that they may have overlooked an option; perhaps there are other ways to resolve the problem without calling meetings and sending out intimidating memos. Second, writers should show how they are willing to participate in the solution by suggesting their willingness to meet with a third party, the party in question, or others. This shows that writers have good will toward the organization.

35. DO NOT TAKE YOUR READER BY SURPRISE OR PRESS THEM TO THE WALL
Do not wait until the end of the day to introduce a problem or concern via memo or .
Avoid writing a litany of concerns that you have been harboring for a long period of time.
Mouse-click to activate text
Explanation: One of the quickest ways to frustrate someone is to surprise him or her by either copying a complaint to both him or her and their boss (skipping over the chain of command) or waiting until the end of the day to introduce a problem. This is likely to compromise the complaint’s effectiveness and alienate the writer from his or her audience. Once the audience is alienated, co-workers and employers may not express any empathy toward the writer, his or her concerns may not be addressed in a timely manner, the message may be ignored, or the writer may receive a flippant .
Rather than take readers by surprise writers should address concerns as soon as possible and with as much decorum and diplomacy as possible.

36. What you say cannot be taken back; it is in black and white.
FLAMING IN S
Flaming is a virtual term for venting or sending inflammatory messages in .
Avoid flaming because it tends to create a great deal of conflict that spirals out of control.
Flame fights are the equivalent of food fights and tend to affect observers in a very negative way.
What you say cannot be taken back; it is in black and white.
Mouse-click to activate text
Explanation: Many people become frustrated with a co-worker, boss, or office policy and have the need to vent that frustration. However, there are some serious problems with flaming and it should happen sparingly in s.
Activity: (read the following to the audience) “I am so sick and tired of all the crap that goes on in this office. Judy is the most annoying person that I’ve ever known and she hardly ever gets her work done in a timely manner and I’m tired of watching her do nothing. Besides that, every time I try and get help Larry just acts like there isn’t a problem. I am SO CLOSE TO QUITTING! I swear that if someone says another thing to me I am out the door honestly. The procedures in here are only for certain people and the rest are favorites. As a matter of fact, I don’t even think this problem can be solved until Judy is fired.”
Discussion: Have the audience think about the ramifications of sending this . Who will be hurt? How? What could have been done by the writer earlier to avoid this build up of frustration? Might the writer have some legitimate concerns that are masked by his or her anger? What might be a better way to write about those concerns?
*Angell and Heslop

37. KEEP FLAMING UNDER CONTROL
Before you send an message, ask yourself, “would I say this to this person’s face?”
Calm down before responding to a message that offends you. Once you send the message it is gone.
Read your message twice before you send it and assume that you may be misinterpreted when proofreading.
Mouse-click to activate text
Explanation: It is easy for writers to let their guards down when communicating electronically because they are not actually getting immediate feedback. The nature of communication changes. Sometimes people tend to do and say things over and on electronic mailing lists that they would never do in an office meeting or face to face with a co-worker. It is essential that the participants understand how unproductive flaming s are and the snowball effect they can have in the office (because they can be forwarded or printed).
Reminder: Do not use obscene or abusive language and do not flame in a public forum like a message group or electronic mailing list.
*Angell and Heslop

38. RESPONDING TO A FLAME
Avoid getting bogged down by details and minor arguments
If you are aware that the situation is in the process of being resolved let the reader know at the top of the response
Apologise if necessary
Empathise with the sender’s frustration and tell them they are right if that is true
If you feel you are right, thank them for bringing the matter to your attention
Explain what led to the problem in question
Mouse-click to activate text
Explanation: When responding to a flame, the respondent must do his or her best to remain professional and neutral. s are infamous for creating misunderstandings. Try to be as clear as possible and as empathetic as possible.
If none of the above tactics work then it is most appropriate to take this concern outside of the electronic sphere and into the traditional interpersonal (face to face) sphere.
*Angell and Heslop

39. WHEN WON’T WORK
There are times when you need to take your discussion out of the virtual world and make a phone call.
If things become very heated, a lot of misunderstanding occurs, or when you are delivering very delicate news then the best way is still face-to face.
Explanation: Not all messages are best delivered via . There are many instances when one should stop and say, “It’s time to meet or talk in person because we’ve gotten as far as we can through .”
Generally, most people are agreeable to talking in person.
Reminder: Because of the facelessness of there are a number of misunderstandings and misperceptions that can occur.

40. ABBREVIATIONS
Only use common abbreviations or abbreviations you are sure the reader will understand!
Examples
i.e. (id est) …
e.g. (exempli gratia) …
NB (nota bene) …
PS (postscript) …
BTW (by the way)
asap (as soon as possible)

41. OTHER ABBREVIATED FORMS
Do not treat as text messaging!
Cul8r = ?
Qty = ?
Rec’d = ?
Pls = ?
Wd = ?
Hv = ?
Otoh = ?
Bw = ?

42. BE CAREFUL ……

44. Don't send private messages with the company account
Use BCC if necessary
Be professional. Ensure your work s don't contain 'u', ‘cul8r', ‘ru', and/or several million other texting/chatroom acronyms
Check tone
Don't use when you are angry
Get clarification
Quoting – Cut and paste the most relevant sentence from the message to which you are responding

45. Use meaningful subject lines
Be brief
Summarise
Don’t cheat with templates
Use 'Reply All' only when necessary
Remember the telephone!
If it's urgent, say so
On vacation? Generate an “out of office” reply.
Proofread!!!

46. EMAIL TIPS Greetings and closings Reply all
“Are you happy for ANYONE to read your ?” test
lists
Organisation – formatting
Not revising
Attachments
Immediacy vs. convenience
To, Cc, Bcc