1. March and April Warm UPs  More sentences to correct…

2. Fossum English 10/12

3. Warm Up 52 March 22/23  carl waisted his 1 st year at college by not studying enough and spending to much time at parties

4. REVISED  Carlos wasted his first year at college by studying too little and partying too much.

5. WU # 53 March 26/27  the reason they were so eager to sell tickets is because their trying to re-furbish the old gymnasium

6. Revised  They were so eager to sell tickets because they're trying to refurbish the old gymnasium.

7. WU#55 March 28/29  there is a desire on the part of many of us to maintain a Spring Recess for the purpose of getting away from the demands of our Studies

8. Much Better  We want a spring recess so we can get away from our studies. OR  We want a spring recess to escape our studies.

9. WU #56 April 10/11 by changing the oil every three thousand miles the car was kept in excellent condition

10. Revised for dangling modifier  Changing the oil every 3,000 miles, we kept the car in excellent condition.

11. WU #57 April 12/13  he was really late to his english class due to the fact that he had to finish his math test

12. Revising for “bloat”  He was late for English because he had to finish his math test.

13.  No one on this bus seems to know ______ way around this part of New York City.

16.  Jefferson's thoughts that displayed his new support for the Constitution were  documented in one very unique letter to his friend James Madison.  Revision: Jefferson documented his new support of the Constitution in a unique  letter to his friend, James Madison.

17.  Writers should spend a great deal of time thinking about their arguments to make sure  they are not superficial.  Revision: Writers should spend a great deal of time thinking about their  arguments to make sure that those arguments are not superficial.

18.  After reading the original study, the article remains unconvincing.  (The article did not read the study; a person did.)  Revision: After reading the original study, I remain unconvinced.  1

19.  Three reasons why steel companies keep losing money are that their plants are  inefficient, high labor costs, and foreign competition is increasing.  Revision: Three reasons why steel companies keep losing money are inefficient  plants, high labor costs, and increasing foreign competition.

23.  Most important may be the bear's body temperature, it remains relatively constant compared to that of true hibernators

24.  Most important may be the bear's body temperature, which remains relatively constant compared to that of true hibernators