1. Flow 2: Coherence & Cohesion
English 111
October 14, 2014

2. Flow: Or what kinds of changes should I make to my draft when?
1. Revision
Coherence (Logical Clarity)
Organizational Patterns
Thesis, Topic Sentences, Paragraphs
Persuasiveness (Ethos, Pathos, Logos)
Strong Arguments with valid Evidence
Improving your credibility as an author
Engaging your readers’ emotions & interest
Essay-level changes
When you are in the revising stage of writing, this means making big level changes – anywhere from rethinking your whole topic or thesis to reorganizing the essay or adding and removing content. Some of the time you spend on your writing after the first draft should be in this stage.

3. Flow: Revising, Editing, Proofreading
Coherence/
Cohesiveness
Transitions
Point of View
Verb Tense
Repetition
Voice & Tone
Word Choice
Sentence Variety
Redundancy
Sentence-Level Changes
When you are in the editing stage of writing, you are making adjustments to each sentence, improving the coherence of each sentence and the cohesiveness between them, and enhancing the voice or tone of your essay. Do not engage in editing until you have made the big changes you want to make in revision.

4. Flow: Revising, Editing, Proofreading
Grammar
Conjugation
Pronoun Agreement
Sentence Word Order
Punctuation & Spelling
Citation & Formatting
MLA & APA rules
Correctness & Error Changes
When you are in the proofreading stage of writing, you are making relatively simple fixes, correcting errors and mistakes. There’s no sense in doing this until all the big revision and editing changes are made.

5. Editing for Flow: Coherence
Word Repetition, p. 430
Repeating key words to tie ideas together throughout

6. Editing for Flow: Cohesion
Point of View, p. 433
1st Person
Ref. to Personal Experience
Singular (I, me, my, mine, etc.)
Plural (we, us, our, ours, etc.)
2nd Person
Instructional/informal
you, your, yours, etc.
3rd Person
Formal, Academic, Objective
Singular (he, she, it, him, hers, its)
Plural (they, them, their, theirs)

7. Editing for Flow: Cohesion
Verb Tense
Maintaining same verb tense throughout
Standard method is to write about events in another story in present verb tense
Most important thing is to be consistent.

8. Editing for Flow: Voice & Tone
Sentence Variety
Writing sentences of varying lengths and various beginnings
Word Choice
Selecting a more accurate, specific, or descriptive word
Avoiding Redundancy
Removing words that are awkwardly repeated