1. Essay Writing Success Criteria

2. Thesis Statement Level 3: The 1920s did Roar
The 1920s was a roaring decade
The 1920s did not roar
Level 4:
The 1920s were an era of many advantages and progress in Canada
The 1920s were very prosperous times in Canada
The 1920s was an important and prosperous decade for Canadians

3. What is the Success Criteria for Thesis Statements?
Be specific about the topic
Definite opinion
Words that reflect opinion
States the What and Why you are arguing that point
Formal language

4. Subtopics Level 3: minorities, prohibition, women
Economy, women, entertainment
New inventions, discovery of insulin, prohibition
Level 4:
improvement in women’s rights, growth of the economy, enhancements in Canadian politics
Economic growth, increasing independence from Britain, enhanced entertainment industry
Numerous inventions forwarded the quality of life in Canada, prohibition raised awareness about drinking, women’s movement increased the rights of women

5. What is the success criteria for subtopics?
Elaborate on the purpose of the subpoint
Must be specific and support thesis
Helps answer the “so what”

6. Topic Sentences Level 3: Crime rates rose in the 20s
Prohibition was quite important
The 20s was a great time for new innovations
Level 4:
The inventions of the 20s were a large factor in the success of the decade
Throughout the 1920s the economy prospered significantly due to many new inventions
The economy in Canada boomed due to new inventions which made the 1920s prosperous

7. What is the success criteria for Topic Sentences?
Relate back to thesis (What, Why, How)
Formal tone
Expand diction
Roadmap to your paragraph

8. Points Level 3: In the 1920s women were given the right to vote
Canada became trade partners with the US
The discovery of new medicine, insulin
Level 4
The discovery of insulin was a factor that contributed to the roaring 20s
New major industries developed in the 1920s, such as the radio and automobiles industries
The invention of the battery-less radio helped the economy in the 1920s

9. What is the success criteria for Points
Prove your subtopic
Describe vs just stating
Incorporating historical significance
Links to topic (relevant proof)

10. Evidence Level 3: Ted Rogers invented the radio in the early 1920s
They were Canada's most successful basketball team at the time
Canadians used radios to entertain guests at parties and events and elevate their social status
Level 4:
In 1929, a little over 2/3s of Canada’s imports were from the USA, The exports were also high at 40% to the USA
The Balfour Declaration of 1926 stated that Britain, Canada and other dominations were independent, self- governing countries having equal status with Britain
In 1920 the Dominion Elections Act of 1900 that prevented women from voting or holding office was amended giving women the equal right to vote

11. What is the success criteria for Evidence?
Use statistics/Quotations
Use specific details such as names, issues, legalities etc
Facts
Don’t make it sound like a topic sentence

12. Analysis
Level 3:
This helped Canadians elevate their social statuses and also helped our economy
Because of Banting and Best’s discovery people around the world could be saved
This was a huge movement for women’s suffrage and rights and was the first step to women becoming “persons” in society
Level 4:
The persons case had a ripple effect that led to the constitution being changed again in Therefore Canadians began to see the constitution as their own, something they could alter
American investment created many new jobs and products to become available as American-run branch plants and businesses started cropping up
These popular forms of music and art brought people out to join in the community, which meant the entertainment industry boomed and in turn made the entire economy better as more people spent money on different forms of entertainment.

13. What is the success criteria for Analysis?
Describes how/why it connects to your essay (your side of the argument)
Outlines the significance of the point and how it is relevant to your thesis

14. Concluding Sentences Level 3:
Prohibition was a major event effecting everyone in the 1920s
Inventions helped the Canadian economy by creating new jobs
Jazz culture helped people evolve socially and culturally
Level 4:
The boom in industry, increased wages, and American Investment all fuelled the “roar” of the 20s
The economical growth of the 20s was phenomenal because of the introduction of buying on credit, the stock market, and a burst of new inventions and innovations
As such, the women’s right movement in the 1920s created prosperous and lasting change

15. What is the success criteria for Concluding Sentences?
State the HOW affect is established
Summary of points you discussed in your paragraph
Go back to your thesis and your side of the argument