1. Africa Research Project Grading
Research ? & Thesis Sheet (TRS) #1
Note/Source Cards
Outline
Peer Editing
Research ? & Thesis Sheet (TRS) #2
Rough Draft
Final Essay = 100 pts (Writing)

2. Thesis-Driven Paper
A thesis-driven paper makes an arguable claim and defends it. Do not confuse a research paper with a report: you need to offer a thesis about your topic and then present evidence and analysis that provides support and explanation.

3. The Bad Too broad (and too obvious)
The Russian Revolution sparked people to rebel against the government and create a new society.

4. The Bad
Too specific
The Russian Revolution caused the peasants in Moscow to change their thinking about what it meant to be Russian and ultimately became more unhappy.

5. The Good Specific and provable
The injustice in Lenin’s life paralleled the conditions in Russia, fueling Lenin to lead the revolution that would change the face of Russian politics.

6. Things to avoid: Topics very hard to argue
i.e. people’s attitudes changing, hypotheticals, etc.
If you can plug in another topic into your thesis and it still makes sense, it’s too broad

7. TRS #1
It is OK if you have needs work or really needs work, this is a process, but keep working on it
Ask questions & USE your work time!!!!!!!!!!
Research Questions
Be specific and focused
Don’t just repeat the prompt or just insert the name of a country
Thesis
careful with words: was very important, was significant, most significant… NAME what was important, NAME the significance… don’t need to state the wording

8. Africa Research Project Grading
Research ? & Thesis Sheet (TRS) #1
Note/Source Cards
Outline
Peer Editing
Research ? & Thesis Sheet (TRS) #2
Rough Draft
Final Essay = 100 pts (Writing)

9. Academic Voice-Word Usage
All numbers under 10 are written out – one, not 1
Any history is written in the past tense
Have you referred to historical people in correct manner
First time talking about them using full name, then just last name on any reference after the first
Do not use contractions and do not use first person
Don’t, didn’t, etc… “I”, “me”, “my”, “our” or “we”
Avoid speculations
careful with words: would, could, should, may, might, probably… etc.
Avoid generalizations
careful with words: many, everybody, most, all, people, society… etc.

10. Writing – What’s Required in the Essay?
Introduction
Should include a hook – The first sentence, designed to get your reader interested in the essay
Contextual information – Any information your reader needs to know to understand your essay
Remember pretend like your reader knows nothing about what you wrote
Your thesis statement
Create your clear, concise argument
It is THE LAST SENTENCE in the paragraph

11. Writing – What’s Required in the Essay?
Body Sections – As many as you need to prove your argument
Each section should include a body thesis statement
Each section should include evidence that supports your argument
Each piece of evidence must be analyzed
You should also include transitional sentences
NOTE* Remember just because you have written a BTS you don’t have to write one paragraph, you can have multiple

12. Writing – What’s Required in the Essay?
Conclusion
Restate your full thesis in the first sentence
Wrap up any major points you were making in your essay
Remind your reader what your major points were
Do not include any questions

13. Writing – What’s Required in the Essay?
Body Sections – As many as you need to prove your argument
Each section should include a body thesis statement
Each section should include evidence that supports your argument
Each piece of evidence must be analyzed
You should also include transitional sentences
NOTE* Remember just because you have written a BTS you don’t have to write one paragraph, you can have multiple

15. Main Thesis-Body Thesis Connection
Hannibal's tactics consistently defeated the Italians by winning allies, preventing losses, and immobilizing his opponents; thereby exposing the weaknesses of the Roman Empire.

16. Main Thesis-Body Thesis Connection
Hannibal's tactics consistently defeated the Italians by winning allies, preventing losses, and immobilizing his opponents; thereby exposing the weaknesses of the Roman Empire.

17. Main Thesis-Body Thesis Connection
Hannibal's tactics consistently defeated the Italians by winning allies, preventing losses, and immobilizing his opponents; thereby exposing the weaknesses of the Roman Empire.
Body Thesis #1:
During the second Punic war, Hannibal’s conversion of local forces to his armies allowed him to consistently beat the Romans.

18. Main Thesis-Body Thesis Connection
Hannibal's tactics consistently defeated the Italians by winning allies, preventing losses, and immobilizing his opponents; thereby exposing the weaknesses of the Roman Empire.
Body Thesis #2:
Hannibal’s successful Italian campaign was also aided by his prevention of losses.

19. Main Thesis-Body Thesis Connection
Hannibal's tactics consistently defeated the Italians by winning allies, preventing losses, and immobilizing his opponents; thereby exposing the weaknesses of the Roman Empire.
Body Thesis #3:
Finally, Hannibal’s ability to control his enemies’ movements allowed him overcome inferior numbers to win battles.

20. Main Thesis-Body Thesis Connection
Finally, Hannibal’s ability to control his enemies’ movements allowed him overcome inferior numbers to win battles.
Does the evidence he included link to his Body Thesis?
A primary example was at the battle of Trebbia river, wherein he sent Numidian cavalrymen to taunt the Romans prompting the consul [Sempronius] to take rash action and send his unfed men across the frigid river, only to be decimated by Hannibal’s well-rested and well-fed force (Encyclopædia Britannica).

21. What exactly is due tomorrow…
12/14: Rough Draft + TRS #2 (Boxes C & D)
**Hard copy & turnitin.com-BEFORE class starts
Typed Rough Draft
Hard copy brought to class
File submitted to turnitin.com BEFORE class starts
TRS #2
HARD COPY only
Fill out boxes C & D on the SAME SHEET you did the TRS #1 so I can see the changes you make
Turn in to inbox at start of period
I will give back to you with feedback on Friday

23. Writing tips for today…
Should have roughly 5 paragraphs overall
2 sources per paragraph (minimum)
2 pieces of evidence per paragraph (minimum)
No quote longer than two lines since this paper is only
Not every piece of evidence should be quote – use when needed
Have analysis for every piece of evidence
4 CREDIBLE sources overall in essay (minimum)
Use MLA 8 (check out SHS Library website with questions)
Check your sources – no date, no publisher (N.p.)… be careful, when in doubt use the SHS Library Databases
In conclusion, the first sentence should be a RE- STATEMENT of your thesis
In introduction, include a general time period and location