1. Descriptive Lead Example

2. Object – rough draft beginning I remember when I would visit my grandparents and I would help my grandma in her garden. As we picked vegetables my grandma would always recite stories. My favorite was a Winnie-the-Pooh story where Eeyore falls into a river. I now have a snow globe resembling that story as a memento of the times my grandma and I spent together in her garden. Needs a Lead to draw reader in.

3. Object – which lead is being used? They were hot summer days when I would spend some time of the summer with my grandparents on their farm. My grandma and I would spend some quality time in her garden picking string beans, tomatoes, and cucumbers. I remember the feel of the warm breeze on my cheek, the prickly leaves on my thumb and forefinger. There were always moments where I would have to stop and shoo away a fly and notice that my grandma never did the same – I guess she was used to them by now. I remember my grandma would always recite stories as we picked. My favorite was a Winnie- the-Pooh story where Eeyore falls into a river. I now have a snow globe resembling that story as a memento of the times my grandma and I spent together in her garden. Anecdote

4. My grandmother has had her garden for 30+ years, and always had the help of her 13 children until the youngest moved out. Now, it is my turn to step into the garden shoes and help my grandma with her hobby combined with tradition. I remember when I would visit my grandparents and I would help my grandma in her garden. As we picked vegetables my grandma would always recite stories. My favorite was a Winnie-the-Pooh story where Eeyore falls into a river. I now have a snow globe resembling that story as a memento of the times my grandma and I spent together in her garden. Background

5. Object – which lead is being used? “Let’s go make sure grandpa is staying out of trouble. We will disguise our spying by working in the garden. Grandpa never catches onto that,” is what my grandma would say as an excuse to work in her garden. I remember when I would visit my grandparents and I would help my grandma in her garden. As we picked vegetables my grandma would always recite stories. My favorite was a Winnie-the-Pooh story where Eeyore falls into a river. I now have a snow globe resembling that story as a memento of the times my grandma and I spent together in her garden. Quotation

6. Your task… Choose which of the 3 (character, object, place) that best represents your ability to write a descriptive essay Use the Leads handout out & examples to create a lead for your descriptive essay. Use the Steps for Success to improve your rough draft to turn into a typed rough draft for tomorrow Need to add more descriptions: senses (5), similes (2), metaphor (1), alliteration (1), onomatopoeia (1) Length: 1-2 pages, typed, double spaced, 12 pt Times New Roman Exchange your rough draft with another person to exchange feedback for improvement & ways to add description