Writing and Supporting Your Thesis Oh, my goodness, we have work to do.

Problem 1: Include books or characters in thesis when comparing literature The issue of civil rights has been so controversial and debatable that they are continued to be fought for today. Problem: Just a general statement of belief and not tied to literature.

Problem 1: Include books or characters in thesis when comparing literature (cont.) Restrictions can pose beneficial and negative influences. Problem: Just a general statement of belief and not tied to literature.

Problem 1: Include books or characters in thesis when comparing literature (cont.) Teenagers are nowadays considered rebellious because of our actions, along with how most caucasion Americans thought that African Americans were doing in the mid-1900s. Problem: Just a general statement of belief and not tied to literature. Speculating (guessing)

Problem 2: Thesis compares topic, not theme Both Maya Angelou and the newspaper writer express how themselves or someone else is being limited. Problem: That is the topic, but a theme is a lesson or major idea the author wants you to come away with.

Problem 2: Thesis compares topic, not theme (cont.) Both Maya Angelou and the newspaper writer express how themselves or someone else is being limited. Both Maya Angelou and the newspaper writer express how themselves or someone else is being limited and the rebellious reactions the captivity leads to.

Problem 2: Thesis compares topic, not theme Both poems and the article talked about the issue of freedom. Problem: That is the topic, but a theme is a lesson or major idea the author wants you to come away with.

Problem 2: Thesis compares topic, not theme (cont.) Both poems and the article talked about the issue of freedom. Both poems and the article talked about the issue of freedom, emphasizing the negative impact it can have on development.

Problem 3: Thesis that leaves you nothing to prove/support Although “Animal Farm” and “I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings” are two completely different stories, they relate to each other because they deal with animals. Problem: This is not a theme. In fact, all this requires is that you give evidence that animals existed in the selections.

Problem 3: Thesis that leaves you nothing to prove/support (cont.) Although Jonas and Jessica, the main people in the selections love their freedom, adults cannot obviously agree with this. Problem: You would have to prove why adults can’t agree with loving freedom. This is difficult to impossible because that information is not in either selection.

Problem 4: Thesis is not specific “I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings”, by Maya Angelou said what people are nowadays thinking in “Technology Lets Parents Track Kids Every Move”. Problem: You need to be specific about what they are thinking.

Problem 4: Thesis is not specific (cont.) “I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings”, by Maya Angelou said what people are nowadays thinking in “Technology Lets Parents Track Kids Every Move”. “I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings”, by Maya Angelou emphasizes the same rage that the people from today in “Technology Lets Parents Track Kids Every Move” feel when their freedom has been limited.

Strong Thesis The characters from both these selections are deeply and strongly connected because they both stand for the will to be treated like equals. These three selections share a thematic connection of the consistent display of rebellious reactions of people held in captivity.

Strong Thesis While living in a state of captivity, the caged bird and Jessica are both similar through their persistent hope for freedom.

Problem 5: Using Evidence which Connects to Thesis Thesis: The characters from both these selections are deeply and strongly connected because they both stand for the will to be treated like equals. Ev. 1 “The caged bird sings with a fearful trill of things unknown but longed for still…the caged bird sings of freedom” Yes

Problem 5: Using Evidence which Connects to Thesis (cont.) Thesis: The characters from both these selections are deeply and strongly connected because they both stand for the will to be treated like equals. Ev. 1 “A free bird leaps on the back of the wind and floats downstream…and dares to claim the sky.” No

Problem 5: Using Evidence which Connects to Thesis (cont.) Thesis: The characters from both these selections are deeply and strongly connected because they both stand for the will to be treated like equals. Ev. 1 “There was no way I was going to let her in the car without some way to track where she was going,” Mark Pawlick, her father said. No

Problem 5: Using Evidence which Connects to Thesis (cont.) Thesis: The characters from both these selections are deeply and strongly connected because they both stand for the will to be treated like equals. Ev. 1 “All the new technology may give parents a false sense of security.” No

Problem 5: Using Evidence which Connects to Thesis (cont.) Thesis: The characters from both these selections are deeply and strongly connected because they both stand for the will to be treated like equals. Ev. 1 When you provide teenagers independence, “that’s the moment of growth – and if you lose that…they’ll get stuck developmentally.” No

Problem 5: Using Evidence which Connects to Thesis (cont.) Thesis: The characters from both these selections are deeply and strongly connected because they both stand for the will to be treated like equals. Ev. 1 “When kids feel crowded, they tend to do things they otherwise would not do…[taking] even greater risk[s] because they have a desire to prove their independence and their individuality.” Yes