1. Listening by William Stafford My father could hear a little animal step, or a moth in the dark against the screen, and every far sound called the listening out into places where the rest of us had never been. More spoke to him from the soft wild night than came to our porch for us on the wind; we would watch him look up and his face go keen till the walls of the world flared, widened. My father heard so much that we still stand inviting the quiet by turning the face, waiting for a time when something in the night would touch us too from that other place. Choose one line to inspire a sketch of the poem. Then sketch it and write the line.

4. Revisiting the Rubric  When it is your turn to present your translated rubric point, please BRIEFLY explain how your group decided on the translation and make sure there is nothing else your classmates need you to explain or clarify about your language

5. Personal Memoir Writer’s Workshop Day 10 2 nd Draft Writing: STAR

6. Learning Targets  I can identify a weak simple sentence in my 1 st draft.  I can substitute at least 3 weak verbs/adjectives in my 1 st draft with strong verbs/adjectives in my 2 nd draft  I can take out irrelevant information in my 1 st draft

7. First Draft vs. Second Draft Writing

8. The Power of One  Choose one “weak” or dull simple sentence from your 1 st draft memoir  Copy the sentence next to Monday’s space on the sheet  Store this sheet in a VERY secure place! We will need it every day this week.

9. Monday: I skated over to my teammates. Tuesday: Wednesday: Thursday: Friday:

10. Pimp my Write with STAR  You need to write these notes in your Writer’s Notebook EDITING section  Substitute  Take things out  Add  Rearrange  STAR is an acronym to help us remember some of the most common options we have for “pimping” our writing. (This is also where our 4 highlighters will be put to use)

11. Substitute: Choose one color to highlight these types of revisions  Replace  Overused words  Weak verbs with strong verbs  Weak adjectives with strong adjectives  Common nouns with proper nouns  “Dead” words

12. Take Things Out: Choose one color to highlight these types of revisions  Take out  Unnecessary repetitions  Unimportant or irrelevant information  Parts that might belong in another piece

13. Closure  Fill in one box on the Independent Correction Sheet based on your revision work today  HW reminders: Share your typed draft with me via 365