1. Common Writing Problems: Wordy Writing 9-10 Writing Companion © Perfection Learning ® Reproduction permitted for classroom use only. 1 Lesson 11 Wordy Writing Activity 11.1 Precise Writing (p. 90) Directions: Rewrite each sentence below, eliminating unnecessary words while retaining the meaning. 1. At this point in time, the consensus of opinion is that the actual facts of the case are few in number. 2. It was while practicing the piano that Sylvia heard a really unusual noise.

2. Common Writing Problems: Wordy Writing 9-10 Writing Companion © Perfection Learning ® Reproduction permitted for classroom use only. 2 Lesson 11 Wordy Writing Activity 11.1 Precise Writing (p. 90) Directions: Rewrite each sentence below, eliminating unnecessary words while retaining the meaning. 1. At this point in time, the consensus of opinion is that the actual facts of the case are few in number. Right now, the facts about the case are few. 2. It was while practicing the piano that Sylvia heard a really unusual noise.

3. Common Writing Problems: Wordy Writing 9-10 Writing Companion © Perfection Learning ® Reproduction permitted for classroom use only. 3 Lesson 11 Wordy Writing Activity 11.1 Precise Writing (p. 90) Directions: Rewrite each sentence below, eliminating unnecessary words while retaining the meaning. 1. At this point in time, the consensus of opinion is that the actual facts of the case are few in number. Right now, the facts about the case are few. 2. It was while practicing the piano that Sylvia heard a really unusual noise. While practicing the piano, Sylvia heard an unusual noise.

4. Common Writing Problems: Wordy Writing 9-10 Writing Companion © Perfection Learning ® Reproduction permitted for classroom use only. 4 Lesson 11 Wordy Writing Activity 11.1 Precise Writing (p. 90) 3. There were several old desks lined up against the wall in the room. 4. The first thing that happened is that the burglar alarm failed to go off. 5. In addition, the Hawks’ past record has also shown them to be equally as good as the Tigers at winning football games..

5. Common Writing Problems: Wordy Writing 9-10 Writing Companion © Perfection Learning ® Reproduction permitted for classroom use only. 5 Lesson 11 Wordy Writing Activity 11.1 Precise Writing (p. 90) 3. There were several old desks lined up against the wall in the room. Several old desks were lined up against the wall. 4. The first thing that happened is that the burglar alarm failed to go off. 5. In addition, the Hawks’ past record has also shown them to be equally as good as the Tigers at winning football games.

6. Common Writing Problems: Wordy Writing 9-10 Writing Companion © Perfection Learning ® Reproduction permitted for classroom use only. 6 Lesson 11 Wordy Writing Activity 11.1 Precise Writing (p. 90) 3. There were several old desks lined up against the wall in the room. Several old desks were lined up against the wall. 4. The first thing that happened is that the burglar alarm failed to go off. First, the burglar alarm failed to go off. 5. In addition, the Hawks’ past record has also shown them to be equally as good as the Tigers at winning football games.

7. Common Writing Problems: Wordy Writing 9-10 Writing Companion © Perfection Learning ® Reproduction permitted for classroom use only. 7 Lesson 11 Wordy Writing Activity 11.1 Precise Writing (p. 90) 3. There were several old desks lined up against the wall in the room. Several old desks were lined up against the wall. 4. The first thing that happened is that the burglar alarm failed to go off. First, the burglar alarm failed to go off. 5. In addition, the Hawks’ past record has also shown them to be equally as good as the Tigers at winning football games. In addition, the Hawks’ and the Tigers’ records show they are equally matched football teams.