1. Hamlet Insanity Workshop

2. Labeling Make a key at the top of the person’s paper using your highlighters Sample: Green=Statement Pink=Proof Yellow=Commentary Label the topic sentence Label the transition at the end Highlight statement, proof, and commentary using your key

3. Evaluate Your Claim Does it clearly state Hamlet’s mental state? EVALUATE YOUR PROOF Do you establish that your statement is indeed evident in the play? Do you have direct quotes from the original play, NOT the No Fear version? EVALUATE YOUR COMMENTARY Do you address the WHY of your statement?

4. Evaluate Connections Draw a line between the first quote’s commentary and the claim. Evaluate if you have made this connection in your commentary. If yes, draw a check mark next to the line If no, draw and “x” on the line. Repeat with your second (and third, etc) quote Only draw a check mark if the connection is clear and explicit. I should not need to take a leap of faith to get where you are going.

5. Get Rid of Summary Cross out all instances of summary. Summary should only be EXTREMELY BRIEF to provide context to quotes. Example: In act I, scene ii, just after Hamlet greets Horatio, Hamlet makes the sarcastic comment, “Thrift, thrift, Horatio. The funeral baked meats did coldly furnish forth the marriage tables” (172-173). “just after Hamlet greets Horatio” gives context but does not waste space with summary

6. Sentence Variation Underline and label one OPTION 1 sentence Underline and label one OPTION 2 sentence Underline and label one OPTION 3 sentence Underline and label one OPTION 4 sentence Underline and label one OPTION 5 sentence Underline and label a sentence containing an introductory phrase If you don’t have at LEAST one of each type, revise your existing sentences.

7. Self-Evaluation Re-read your paragraph(s) and your reviewers comments Now that you have gone through the workshop, ask yourself, “How well did I do? What can I do better?” On the TOP of your paper, give yourself a score from 1-10 telling me how well written you believe your paragraph was. Next to the score, make notes of what you need to revise in order to strengthen it Turn in your paragraph(s)