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Lesson 2 Writing Strong Sentences Drafting Objectives: 1.To practice writing concise sentences 2.To draft sentences that have variety
Creating Concise Sentences By: –Avoiding Redundancy –Using Active Verbs
Concise There mustnt be one single word out of place or one word that can be taken out -Katherine Mansfield
Avoid Redundancy Redundantrepetitive; repeating the same idea. RedundantThe slowly moving train crawled up the mountain range. ConciseThe train crawled up the mountain range.
Avoiding Redundancy RedundantShe grew four inches in height in one year, though the doctors medical opinion was that she was done growing. Concise
Avoiding Redundancy RedundantShe grew four inches in height in one year, though the doctors medical opinion was that she was done growing. ConciseShe grew four inches in one year, though her doctor had thought she was done growing.
Use Active Voice PassiveIt was declared by the principal that we would not be allowed to eat lunch off campus. ActiveThe principal declared she would not allow us to eat lunch off campus Active Voice: Putting the person or thing that is doing the action BEFORE the action.
Active v. Passive Voice Active: I hit the ball. Passive: The ball was hit by me. Exercise | Identify the following as active or passive... 1.We love this class. 2.The class was loved by us. 3.A pint of cream is added next. 4.Add a pint of cream. 5.The game was lost by you. 6.You lost the game. 7.Yesterday, I was stung by a bee. 8.Maggie yelled, "A mean bee stung me!" 9.You did not pass! 10.The class was not passed by you.
Wordy Sentence and Passive Voice Worksheet Strengthen these sentences by removing the fillers it and there, and rewrite the sentences to emphasize the logical subjects and verbs. 1.Many mechanics own their own tools. 2.The pilot noticed that the air speed indicator was malfunctioning. 3.Two screws fasten the cover to the wall box. 4.Several different types of needles can be used.
Eliminate the unnecessary words in these sentences. 1.At 8:00 am the prisoners were transferred to the facility. 2.It is necessary that the scalpels be sharp- edged to bisect the specimens. 3.Remove all foreign objects from the sensor machine. 4.In my opinion the city and county agencies are now cooperating together. 5.Either of the timetables is acceptable. 6.I found it interesting. 7.I chose to attend Purdue.
Rewrite the verbs in these sentences to make them active voice. Be sure to keep the same verb tense. 1.The representative requested the appeals board review the case. 2.Dr. Hancocks research has painted a better picture in my head. 3.Mike discovered what he liked about engineering through his research. 4.I was overwhelmed with a decision my senior year. 5.I investigated the type of companies I could work for. 6.When one decides what field of work they are going into many things should be considered.