1. Warm Up D.I.R.T.

2. Dictionary Skills Complete the dictionary skills #3 sheet When you finish, you may work on your story

3. Sketch Notes

4. We will be taking “Sketch Notes” today over Personal Narratives

5. Sketch Notes We will be taking “Sketch Notes” today over Personal Narratives Very important! Keep in a safe place!

6. Sketch Notes We will be taking “Sketch Notes” today over Personal Narratives Very important! Keep in a safe place! You can take them however you want, but do it the way you remember best.

7. Sketch Notes Let’s see some examples!

9. Sketch Notes

12. Personal Narrative As we go over these 5 things, look briefly at your paper to see how you did on them.

13. Personal Narrative Always in the past tense

14. Personal Narrative Always in the past tense Always in the first person

15. Personal Narrative Always in the past tense Always in the first person Always answers every part of the prompt

16. Personal Narrative Always in the past tense Always in the first person Always answer every part of the prompt Has a narrow scope/focus

17. Hook/Introduction

18. You ONLY have 26 lines for your essay.

19. Hook/Introduction You ONLY have 26 lines for your essay. You need to hook the reader IMMEDIATELY

20. Hook/Introduction You ONLY have 26 lines for your essay. You need to hook the reader IMMEDIATELY Your hook should pull the reader in and make them want to read more

21. Personal Narrative Hooks using The Lion King as a sample

22. THESIS: “I had to be courageous in the elephant graveyard.”  We are imagining that we are Nala and need to write a personal narrative essay

23. What is a hook?  Hooking your reader means getting the reader excited and pulling them into your writing like a fisherman catching and reeling in a fish.

24. Hook your reader! Choose a strategy: 1.Begin with a famous quote. (Reminder: Be sure to reference who said or wrote the words. 2.Compare your topic to an unlike thing using a simile or metaphor. 3.Give a startling statistic or fact. (Reminder: Be sure to take from a reliable source and reference) 4.Begin with a zoomed in detailed description.

25. Sample introduction using a quote:  Simba’s father had once told him, “One day all of this will be yours.” It becoming more and more impossible to imagine us having any sense of control over the elephant graveyard as fear crept in like a thief in the night, and stole any ounce of comfort that Simba and I had felt at home. It would take courage that only a lion has for us to make it out alive.

26. Sample introduction using a simile:  It was like a dream. Fog hung low to the ground, making it difficult to see the creatures clearly. But I knew they were there, off in the distance, waiting for me. It would take courage for us to make it out alive.

27. Sample introduction using a zoomed in description:  The barren wasteland of gigantic bones and dirt surrounded us, choking out all signs of life. In the distance we could make out the menacing shadows that were waiting for us. Simba and I had to have courage to make it out alive.

28. YOUR INTODUCTION (paragraph 1) FOR YOUR PERSONAL NARRATIVE (3-4 sentences total)  1-2 sentence hook  A connector sentence that explains the hook and makes it flow into your thesis.  A thesis statement. In this case, our thesis is simple: “I had to be courageous when…” EXAMPLE: “What doesn’t kill you makes you stronger. Stand a little taller.” Those lyrics by Kelly Clarkson played over and over in my head as I ran. I had to be courageous as Simba and I were chased through the elephant graveyard.

29. Hook/Introduction Lets practice writing a hook:

30. Hook/Introduction Think of a time that would be hard to forget. Think about what makes it so hard to forget. Tell what happened. Write a hook for this prompt

31. Sensory Details

32. Describe surroundings

33. Sensory Details Describe surroundings Add depth to your writing

34. Sensory Details Describe surroundings Add depth to your writing Use your five senses to pull the reader into your story

35. Imagery and Sensory Details

36. What is Imagery? Imagery is the use of vivid descriptions to create pictures inside the reader’s mind.

37. What are Sensory Details? Descriptive words that appeal (attract or influence) to the 5 senses to create “word pictures” in the readers mind. They help the story come alive!!

38. What are the five senses? Hearing Sight Touch Taste Smell

39. What kind of examples of sensory details are these? The birds sang sweetly. The tinkling of broken glass. She shrieked with joy.

40. What kind of examples of sensory details are these? As stinky as a dirty diaper. He reminded her of her grandfather, a scent of peppermint and tobacco.

41. What kind of examples of sensory details are these? The sour leftover impression of vomit. As salty as a potato chip. Thick, not-too-sweet chocolate, with a hint of orange. The bitterness of getting her mouth washed out with soap.

42. What kind of examples of sensory details are these? The bright green leaf glistened in the sunlight. The students at El Cajon Valley High School shined in the hall with their bright red and blue school colors!

43. What kind of examples of sensory details are these? She caressed the cool, smooth cover of the laptop. The lotion gave her baby-soft skin. He was tied tightly, and the rough bark gouged his back. It was as soft as rabbit’s fur. The biscuit was as hard as a rock.

44. Let’s Practice!

45. Practice 2: Directions Rewrite the following “sense-less” sentences using sensory details. Be creative! Use your imagination!

46. Practice 2: Sentences 1. The pizza was delicious.

47. Practice 2: Sentences 1. The pizza was delicious. 2. The fans enjoyed the game.

48. Practice 2: Sentences 1. The pizza was delicious. 2. The fans enjoyed the game. 3. It was raining outside today.

49. Practice 2: Sentences 1. The pizza was delicious. 2. The fans enjoyed the game. 3. It was raining outside today. 4. I ate the nachos.

50. Practice 2: Sentences 1. The pizza was delicious. 2. The fans enjoyed the game. 3. It was raining outside today. 4. I ate the nachos. 5. The students clapped during the movie.

51. Practice 2: Sentences 1. The pizza was delicious. 2. The fans enjoyed the game. 3. It was raining outside today. 4. I ate the nachos. 5. The students clapped during the movie. 6. These are my very old tennis shoes.

52. Directions Norman Rockwell, a famous 20th century American painter, created an astonishing 321 covers for “The Saturday Evening Post,” each portraying typical American life and values. His covers were so successful that when his art appeared on the magazine’s cover, 50,000 – 75,000 additional copies of the Saturday Evening Post sold at newsstands. For each of the Rockwell paintings that follow, create a list of sensory details for each picture. Then write a descriptive paragraph on the slide that follows using your sensory detail list. Be creative and use your imagination to describe the scene in each picture.

53. 1 Sight: Hearing: Touch: Taste: Smell:

54. 2 Sight: Hearing: Touch: Taste: Smell:

55. 3 Sight: Hearing: Touch: Taste: Smell:

56. 4 Sight: Hearing: Touch: Taste: Smell:

57. 5 Sight: Hearing: Touch: Taste: Smell:

58. Show Not Tell

59. DO NOT LIST

60. Show Not Tell DO NOT LIST Don’t say it was “hot, sunny day”, actually show me how hot and sunny it was.

61. Show Not Tell DO NOT LIST Don’t say it was “hot, sunny day”, actually show me how hot and sunny it was. Talk about the condensation on the glass of iced tea, or the sweat beading up on the end of your nose. Talk about how your clothes were sticking to you or about how the sun was draining your energy.

62. Show Not Tell

63. http://swandawritingresources.wikispaces.com/Show+NOT+T ell

64. Grammar/Punctuation

65. Sentence structure can really help your writing.

66. Grammar/Punctuation Sentence structure can really help your writing. It can add to the tone/mood and help your narrative flow naturally.

67. Reflection/Conclusion

68. ALWAYS REFLECT AT THE END

69. Reflection/Conclusion ALWAYS REFLECT AT THE END How did this experience affect you/what did you learn from it

70. Reflection/Conclusion ALWAYS REFLECT AT THE END How did this experience affect you/what did you learn from it Try to think deeply

71. Reflection/Conclusion Here are some examples: