1. 1. Parenthetical Citation 1. If a number in ( ) is the same as the last number in ( ), erase the first number unless it’s a direct quote In this fire, 146 workers, mostly young women, were trapped and could not escape. As a result, they were burned to death (2). After Perkins witnessed this terrible tragedy, she went to Albany, which is the capital of New York. There she worked for the State Labor Department for better factory laws (2). “The resulting Wagner-Smith Acts (1913) mandated new fire laws for New York state” (2). 2. Change Source #’s to author’s last name or first main word of title if no author given

2. Frances Perkins was greatly inspired by the Manhattan Triangle Shirt Waist Factory fire. This fire happened in 1911 in New York City (2). In this fire, 146 workers, mostly young women, were trapped and could not escape. As a result, they were burned to death (2). After Perkins witnessed this terrible tragedy, she went to Albany, which is the capital of New York. There she worked for the State Labor Department for better factory laws (2). “The resulting Wagner-Smith Acts -1913- mandated new fire laws for New York state” (2). Her witnessing of this tragic fire resulted in several safety improvements in factories. Perkins helped to improve the conditions in factories in many ways. She helped to improve the sanitary conditions of bakeries that were in cellars (3). Also, she passed the 54-hour law which limited the number of hours a person under the age of 18 could work (2). Through the Factory Investigating Commission, she helped pass a ban on factory workers under the age of 14 (3). Many improvements in working conditions were made as a result of Perkins’ efforts.

3. Frances Perkins was greatly inspired by the Manhattan Triangle Shirt Waist Factory fire. This fire happened in 1911 in New York City. In this fire, 146 workers, mostly young women, were trapped and could not escape. As a result, they were burned to death. After Perkins witnessed this terrible tragedy, she went to Albany, which is the capital of New York. There she worked for the State Labor Department for better factory laws. “The resulting Wagner- Smith Acts -1913- mandated new fire laws for New York state” (Thomas). Her witnessing of this tragic fire resulted in several safety improvements in factories. She helped to improve the conditions in factories in many ways. She helped to improve the sanitary conditions of bakeries that were in cellars (“First”). Also, she passed the 54-hour law which limited the number of hours a person under the age of 18 could work (Thomas). Through the Factory Investigating Commission, she helped pass a ban on factory workers under the age of 14 (“First”). Many improvements in working conditions were made as a result of Perkins’ efforts.

4.  Read pages 95-97 in Research Guide on “Works Cited List or Bibliography” 1. Put your bibliography cards in alphabetical order 2. Write them on a separate sheet of paper 3. Start the 1 st line of each entry bumping the red line of your paper 4. The second & following lines of an entry is indented 5 spaces 5. Skip a line between each entry 6. List only sources you actually use in the essay If it’s not in parentheses in the essay, it should not appear in the Works Cited

5. Carroll, Joyce Armstrong, Edward E. Wilson, and Gary Ferlini. Writing and Grammar: Communication in Action. Bronze Level. Upper Saddle River, NJ: Prentice Hall, 2001. Goldenberg, Phyllis. A Student Guide to Writing a Research Paper. New York: Sadlier-Oxford, 1997.

6.  Research Guide, page 104-105  Parallel structure Words connected by “and” Must be same grammar structure Red Lit. book, page R64 Not Parallel: Thurgood Marshall was angry about people being segregated in school, Brown vs. Board of Education, and wanted to be a part of the civil rights movement. Parallel: Thurgood Marshall was angry about people being segregated in school, decided Brown vs. Board of Education, and wanted to be a part of the civil rights movement.  Repetition of key words Repeating key words is good (segregation, salt march, …) Avoid repeating simple words  Clear pronoun reference Pronoun-antecedent reference should be clear Draw an arrow to the noun the pronoun refers to  Transitions Underline transitions in your essay from list, page 105 Add at least 5 more