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1 Apalling 2000 AS UE Proofreading

2 81. Chek Keng was used to be a remote, beautiful and 82. tranquil bay in Sai Kung, and providing an excellent 83. natural retreat for city dweller in Hong Kong. Over In the past, Chek Keng was a beautiful bay. Later in the paragraph, we will learn that it isn’t anymore because it is now polluted. Delete “was”.

3 81. Chek Keng was used to be a remote, beautiful and 82. tranquil bay in Sai Kung, and providing an excellent 83. natural retreat for city dweller in Hong Kong. Over If we keep the conjunction “and”, “providing” becomes the second verb in the sentence. Ex.: Tom lived in America and enjoyed it. “used to be” means that we are talking about a situation in the past. Replace “providing” with “provided”. You can also delete a word to turn the second part of the sentence into an adjective phrase. Ex.: I saw a man standing across the road. Delete “and”.

4 81. Chek Keng was used to be a remote, beautiful and 82. tranquil bay in Sai Kung, and providing an excellent 83. natural retreat for city dweller in Hong Kong. Over A “city dweller” is a person who lives in a city. Obviously, more than one city dweller has been to Chek Keng. Replace “dweller” with “dwellers”.

5 Over 84. the past few years, however, it has become heavily pollute. “pollute” is a verb. We are describing the present state of Chek Keng so we need an adjective. Replace “pollute” with “polluted”.

6 85. A lot of plastic bags and other unsightly rubbish 86. have dumped on the shore. There is a 87. disgusting smell in the bay caused the refuse. No errors.

7 85. A lot of plastic bags and other unsightly rubbish 86. have dumped on the shore. There is a 87. disgusting smell in the bay caused the refuse. Bags and rubbish cannot dump themselves. Change to the passive voice: “have been dumped”.

8 85. A lot of plastic bags and other unsightly rubbish 86. have dumped on the shore. There is a 87. disgusting smell in the bay caused the refuse. Note: The pronunciation of the verb “refuse” (say no) and the noun “refuse” (rubbish) are different. Bad smells do not cause refuse. Refuse causes bad smells. We can imagine the words “which is” before the verb “caused”. A preposition needs to be added. Add “by” after “caused”.

9 88. Chek Keng illustrates the multitude of problem 89. facing our natural environment, which being ruined by greed and ignorance. “Multitude” means many. Replace “problem” with “problems”.

10 88. Chek Keng illustrates the multitude of problem 89. facing our natural environment, which being ruined by greed and ignorance. Obviously, the verb “ruined” should be in the passive voice, but the verb isn’t complete here. What tense is being used? Present continuous. Add “is”: “which is being ruined”.

11 … which (is) being ruined 90. by greed and ignorance. The only responds we 91. have see over the years from the HK Government 92. has been empty words and breaking promises. Which sounds better? The only sing/song … We need a noun and “responds” is a verb. Replace “responds” with “response”. Note the similar pronunciation of the two words.

12 … which (is) being ruined 90. by greed and ignorance. The only responds we 91. have see over the years from the HK Government 92. has been empty words and breaking promises. Obviously, “have see” doesn’t sound right. We are using “see” in the present perfect. What is the past participle of “see”? Replace “see” with “seen”.

13 … which (is) being ruined 90. by greed and ignorance. The only responds we 91. have see over the years from the HK Government 92. has been empty words and breaking promises. “breaking” is being used to describe which kind of promises are being made. However, promises cannot break themselves. Replace “breaking” with “broken”.

14 93. Chek Keng is die and, unless prompt action is taken to 94. clear up the mess, it will beyond saving. If we don’t 95. act now, our remaining areas of unspoilt land end up 96. being completely and unnecessarily destructed. The rest of the sentence tells us that Chek Keng is not completely dead yet. From the context, we can assume that it is in the process of dying. Use the present continuous. Replace “die” with “dying”.

15 93. Chek Keng is die and, unless prompt action is taken to 94. clear up the mess, it will beyond saving. If we don’t 95. act now, our remaining areas of unspoilt land end up 96. being completely and unnecessarily destructed. “will beyond saving” doesn’t sound right. “beyond saving” is a description of how it will be in the future. Add “be”: “it will be beyond saving”.

16 93. Chek Keng is die and, unless prompt action is taken to 94. clear up the mess, it will beyond saving. If we don’t 95. act now, our remaining areas of unspoilt land end up 96. being completely and unnecessarily destructed. “end up” is a phrasal verb meaning to come to be in a particular situation. We are talking about a future potential situation. Add “will”: “unspoilt land will end up”.

17 93. Chek Keng is die and, unless prompt action is taken to 94. clear up the mess, it will beyond saving. If we don’t 95. act now, our remaining areas of unspoilt land end up 96. being completely and unnecessarily destructed. “Destructed” means to destroy purposely, and it is usually used to describe the destruction of rockets. Replace “destructed” with “destroyed”.

18 97. Hong Kong people seem to unaware that they are 98. wasting one of their best resource – the environment. “Unaware” is an adjective. “Seem to” cannot be followed by an adjective. You wouldn’t say “seem to strong”. Add “be”: “HK people seem to be unaware”.

19 97. Hong Kong people seem to unaware that they are 98. wasting one of their best resource – the environment. The use of “one of” indicates that the environment is one of many … Replace “resource” with “resources”.


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