3Which Poems? Identify which poems the following lines come from “The lough watersCan petrify wood.”“The globe has spun. He stands in a wooden O.”“Or in the sucking clubber I would splashDelightedly and dam the flowing drain”“Once I carried him milk in a bottleCorked sloppily with paper. He straightened upTo drink it, then fell to right away”“Rattling the classroom windowLike a ruler across the knuckles”
4“The lough watersCan petrify wood.”“The globe has spun. He stands in a wooden O.”“Or in the sucking clubber I would splashDelightedly and dam the flowing drain”“Once I carried him milk in a bottleCorked sloppily with paper. He straightened upTo drink it, then fell to right away”“Rattling the classroom windowLike a ruler across the knuckles”The Relic of MemoryAlphabetsPoemDiggingHailstones
5Principle Examiner’s Comments AO1: As in previous years, there is still evidence of a lack of planning in a number of cases. Candidates have 1 hour 15 minutes to spend on Section A and it is strongly advised that they spend at least 15 minutes planning. 1 hour is more than enough time to write a strong essay, and essays that are well planned will be more likely to be focused and relevant.AO2: Almost all candidates would benefit from closer focus on how meaning is created.AO3i: As in previous sessions, the strongest responses used the partner text as a lens through which to discuss the core text.AO3ii: There are still some cases where candidates do not include any readings at all or even any tentative language (such as ‘perhaps’).
7AO3ii: Suggested ‘interpretations from others’ that could ‘inform’ your own reading of Heaney’s poetryHelen Vendler praised Heaney "the Irish poet whose pen has been the conscience of his country.“His poetry is said to reflect ‘the turbulence of his homeland while simultaneously celebrating the human spirit and the beauty of the natural world’.Heaney’s poetry is said to be concerned with ‘the childhood building blocks of language and environmental surroundings’. His work is said to be a ‘land-language-heritage triangle’."Heaney's writing is full of taste, touch, smell, sight and hearing." It has been said that in Heaney’s poetry ‘it is easy to recognise the emulation of a childlike inner voice’.
10Using Alternative Interpretations Aim to use alternative interpretations to inform your analysis – they can either form a part of your ‘analysis’ sentence, after your quotation, or you could use them as a part of your topic sentence.
11Structuring Your Response Example IntroductionWhat does this do well?
12Structuring Your Response Introduction:Introduce two Heaney’s poems which you will explore in your essay and the attitude expressed in each towards the theme of the question.Use a comparative comment to introduce Sheers’ two poems that you will explore in your essay.State how the Sheers and Heaney pairings present similar/contrasting attitudes towards the theme of the question.
13Structuring Your Response Main Body Paragraphs Throughout the main body of your essay, you need to move confidently between your partner text, Heaney, and your core text, Sheers.
16Structuring Your Response Every paragraph must start with a clear topic sentence – you need to make it clear to the examiner what you’re going to be exploring in this paragraph.Select short, specific quotations to illustrate your point; use phrases such as ‘for example’ to introduce them; you might choose ¾ quotations in one paragraph to support your pointFocus on as specific feature of your quotation and explore how it creates an effect
17Structuring Your Response Use a comparative comment to introduce Sheers’ poemInclude a short quotation and analyse, commenting on the effects of a particular feature.
18The following are useful phrases to show comparison/contrast. Comparative PhrasesThe following are useful phrases to show comparison/contrast.Comparison: similarly/ furthermore/ equally/ in the same way…/ also /in much the same way…/ comparablyContrast: In contrast/ contrastingly/ on the contrary…/ differently…
19Conclusion What does this student’s conclusion do? Your conclusion should summarise the ideas and attitudes in both texts and how they are similar/different