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Business Communications Lesson Ten FJU/AIEDL Dr. M. Connor Based on Excellence in Business Communication,5/e Thill and Bovée
Why write? selling a supervisor on an idea for cutting costs, suggesting more efficient procedures, eliciting cooperation from competing departments, winning employee support for a new benefits package, requesting money for new equipment or funding for a special project, or requesting a favor.
Keep boundaries The most important thing to remember when preparing a persuasive request is to keep your request within bounds. Nothing is as distressing as a request so general, so all encompassing, or so inconsiderate that it seems impossible to grant, no matter how worthy the cause.
Two basic types of persuasive requests Persuasive requests for action Persuasive claims and requests for adjustments.
Persuasive requests for action Whether youre requesting a favor or a budget increase, remember to use the AIDA plan to frame your message. Begin with an attention-getting device. Show readers that you know something about their concerns and that you have some reason for making such a request. In this type of persuasive message, more than in others, a flattering comment about your reader is acceptable, as long as its sincere.
Interest and desire Use the interest and desire sections of your message to cover what you know about the situation youre requesting action on: the facts and figures, the benefits of helping, and any history or experience that will enhance your appeal.
Your goals: 1) to gain credibility for you and your request 2) to make your readers believe that helping you will indeed help solve a significant problem.
Bad requests Be careful not to doom your request to failure by asking your reader to do all of your work for you.
Examples Dont ask your readers to Provide information that you were too lazy to seek. Take action that will save you from embarrassment or inconvenience. Provide total financial support for a cause that nobody else is supporting.
The close for action Once youve demonstrated that your message is relevant to your reader, you can close with a request for some specific action. Be aware, however, that a persuasive memo to a colleague is somewhat more subdued than a persuasive letter to an outsider.
Routine requests When requesting a favor that is routine, such as asking someone to attend a meeting in your absence, use the direct approach and the format for routine messages. But...
Special favors However, when asking for a special favor, such as asking someone to chair an event or to serve as the team leader because you can no longer fill that role, use persuasive techniques to convince your reader of the value of the project. Include all necessary information about the project and any facts and figures that will convince your reader that his or her contribution will be enjoyable, easy, important, and of personal benefit.
Persuasive claims and Requests for Adjustments Although persuasive claims and adjustment requests are sometimes referred to as complaint letters, your goal is to persuade someone to make an adjustment in your favor. Youre not merely getting a complaint off your chest. You reach your goal by demonstrating the difference between what you expected and what you actually got.
Routine vs. persuasive Most claim letters are routine messages and use the direct approach that we covered in earlier lessons. However, suppose you purchase something, and after the warranty expires, you discover that it was defective?
Scenario You write the company a routine request asking for a replacement, but your request is denied. Youre not satisfied, and you still feel you have a strong case. Perhaps you just didnt communicate it well enough the first time. Persuasion is necessary in such cases.
Options? You cant threaten to withhold payment, so try to convey the essentially negative information in a way that will get positive results. Fortunately, most people in business are open to settling your claim fairly. Its to their advantage to maintain your goodwill and to resolve your problem quickly.
Key ingredients The key ingredients of a good persuasive claim are a complete and specific review of the facts and a confident and positive tone. Assume that the other person is not trying to cheat you, but that you also have the right to be satisfied with the transaction. Talk only about the complaint at hand, not about other issues involving similar products or other complaints about the company.
Your goal Your goal is to solve a particular problem, and your audience is most likely to help you if you focus on the benefits of doing so, rather than focusing on the disadvantages of neglecting your complaint.
Begin Begin persuasive claims by stating the basic problem (or with a sincere compliment, rhetorical question, agreeable assertion, or brief review of whats been done about the problem). Include a statement that both you and your audience can agree with or that clarifies what you wish to convince your audience about. Be as specific as possible about what you want to happen.
Middle section Next, give your reader a good reason for granting your claim. Show how your audience is responsible for the problem, and appeal to your readers sense of fair play, good will or moral responsibility. Tell your audience how you feel about the problem, but dont get carried away, dont complain too much, and dont make threats. Make sure your request is calm and reasonable.
Finish up Finally, state your request specifically and confidently. Make sure your request proceeds logically from the problem and the facts youve explained. Remember to specify a deadline for action when necessary or desirable. And dont forget to remind your audience of the main benefit of granting your claim.
Example Text: I bought an Audio-Tech sound system a few months ago to provide background music at my gift shop. Now one of the components, the CD player, does not work right. When we play a CD, it repeats and repeats. This is very irritating to me and my customers, and Audio-Tech needs to fix this problem. Comments: Opening fails to clarify the details of the purchase, the exact product involved, and the problem.
Example Text: My clerks and I noticed this major mess about a month or so after I bought this fancy unit at the McNally Sound and Light Store in St. Louis, where I buy most of my video and CD stuffthough I sometimes buy through catalogs. When one of the clerks first heard the CD repeat, she tried another CD, and sure enough, it did the same thing, so it is a player problem, not a CD problem. Then we set the CD player on digital so that we could see visually what was going on, and sure enough, the sound was repeating and even skipping. Comments: Doesnt include any acceptable reasons for Audio-Tech to consider making an adjustment.
Example Text: When I finally brought the unit back to the store, Henry McNally said that the 60-day warranty had expired, and it was my gift shops problem, but definitely not his problem. He said I probably had a lemon. Comments: Captures the store owners frustration, but fails to persuade the readerwho is still trying to grasp the dimension of the problem.
Example Text: This CD unit probably never did work right. I would think that, since I paid hundreds of dollars for these components, it would work for many years. Other stores here on Main Street cannot believe what a bummer it is to hear irritating background music on this Audio- Tech player. They say that they will not buy Audio-Tech brand if you dont replace my unit. Comments: Touches on what the writer expected from the product, but doesnt state what she wants done. Contains only additional complaining and a vague threat.
Revised version Text: As the owner of a small gift shop, I try to provide a pleasant ambiance for customers, so I play easy listening music on my Audio-Tech Pro III sound system. I play both CD and tapes, but the CH player is not working properly. Please replace this CD unit at no charge. Comment: Clearly describes the problem, the product involved, how the product is used, and what adjustment is requested.
Revised version Text: I purchased the Audio-Tech Pro III system on November 11, 2005, from McNally Sound and Light (312 Lincoln Dr, St. Louis, Missouri 63157). All parts of the unit worked well for a month or so. I first noticed the problem on December 22. The CD would repeat a phrase two or three times in succession before moving on to the rest of the selection. (next paragraph on next slide) Comment: These two paragraphs explain the details of purchase and how and when the problem was discovered.
Revised example Text: At first I assumed it was a defective CD. On December 23, two customers asked me to turn the background music off because it was repeating one phrase sporadically through a classical selection. The next day I checked the unit by setting it on digital and sure enough, every CD I played repeated phrases intermittently. Comment: These two paragraphs explain the details of purchase and how and when the problem was discovered.
Revised version Text: I called McNally, but I couldnt take the unit back until after the holidays on January 5. When I returned on January 17 to pick it up, McNally told me that he could hear a problem but was unable to fix it. He said it was a manufacturing problem, but my warranty had expired, so he could not replace the unit free of charge Comment: Thoroughly explains the involvement of a third party (the dealer).
Revised version Text: Enclosed are the CD component, copies of my original sales form, and McNallys January repair order. Please replace the defective CD unit at no charge to me. Although the 60-day warranty expired on January 1, I discovered the problem well within the warranty period. Comments: Refers to attached receipts
Revised version Text: My decision to purchase Audio-Tech products was motivated by your reputation for both quality products and exceptional service. So I know you will stand behind your product and replace the faulty machine. Comment: Provides the reader with a reason to grant the adjustment (the companys reputation for quality and customer service).
Sending Sales and Fundraising Messages Two distinctive types of persuasive messages are sales and fundraising messages. These messages are often sent in special direct-mail packages that can include brochures, reply forms, or other special inserts. Both types of messages are often written by specialized and highly skilled professionals.
How do sales messages differ from fundraising messages? Sales messages are usually sent by for- profit organizations persuading readers to spend money on products for themselves. Fundraising messages arent usually sent by non-profit organizations persuading readers to donate money or time to help others.
The messages are quite similar Both compete for business and public attention, time and money. Both attempt to persuade readers to spend their time or money on the value being offered, whether that value is the convenience of a more efficient vacuum cleaner or the satisfaction of helping save childrens lives. Both require a few more steps than other types of persuasive messages, and both generally use the AIDA sequence to deliver their messages.
Strategies for sales messages Your purpose in writing a sales message is to sell a product. What does it look like? How does it work? How is it priced? Are there any discounts? How is it packaged? How is it delivered?
Your sales campaign Will you send a letter only? Or will you include brochures, samples, response cards and the like? If you send a brochure, how many pages will it run? Will you conduct a multi-stage campaign, with several mailings and some sort of telephone or in-person follow-up? Or will you rely on a single, hard-hitting mailing?
Price is a factor Expensive items and hard-to-accept propositions call for more elaborate campaigns than low-cost products and simple actions.
Type of audience All these decisions depend on the audience youre trying to reachtheir characteristics and their likely acceptance of or resistance to your message. You must analyze your audience and focus on their needs, interests and emotional concernsjust as you would for any persuasive message. Try to form a mental image of the typical product you wish to sell.
Determining selling points and benefits Sales letters require you to know your products selling points and how each one benefits your particular audience. Youll need to highlight these points when you compose your persuasive messages.
Selling points and benefits Selling points are the most attractive features of an idea or product. Benefits are particular advantages that readers will realize from those features. Selling points focus on the product. Benefits focus on the user.
Staying within the law You can avoid both legal an ethical pitfalls by being genuinely concerned about your audiences needs, but you must also know the law.
Letters as contracts In many places, especially in America, sales letters are considered binding contracts. You must be able to do what you say you can do. So avoid even implying offers of promises that you cant deliver.
Facts about Fraud Misrepresenting the price, quality, or performance of a product in a sales letter is fraud. Fraud also includes using a testimonial by a person misrepresented as being an expert.
Is it fraud? Making a false statement in a sales letter is fraud if the recipient can prove the following; You intended to deceive. You made your statement regarding a fact, not an opinion or speculation. The recipient was justified in relying on your statement. The recipient was damaged by your statement, in a legal sense.
Invasion of privacy Using a persons name, photograph or other identity in a sales letter without permission constitutes invasion of privacywith some exceptions.
More invasions of privacy Publicizing a persons private life in a sales letter can result in legal problems. For example, stating that the president of a local bank, mentioned by name, served six months in prison for income tax evasion is a potentially damaging fact that may be considered an invasion of privacy.
Using Action Terms Action words give strength to any business message, but they are especially important in sales letters.
Compare the following The NuForm desk chair is designed to support your lower back and relieve pressure on your legs. The NuForm desk chair supports your lower back and relieves pressure on your legs.
The version on the right says the same thing in fewer words and emphasizes what the chair does for the user (supports) rather than the intentions of the design team (is designed to support).
Vibrant language Use colorful verbs and adverbs that convey a dynamic image. Be careful, however, not to overdo it: Your factory floors will sparkle like diamonds is hard to believe and may prevent your audience from believing the rest of your message.
Talking about Price The price that people are willing to pay for a product depends on several factors: the price of similar products, the general state of the economy, the psychology of the buyer.
Pricing is complicated Price is a complicated issue and often a sensitive one. So you need to be careful whenever you talk about price in your sales message.
Words can help Whether you highlight or downplay the price of your product, prepare your readers for it. Words such as luxurious and economical provide unmistakable clues about how your price compares with that of competitors.
Example for budget price All the Features of Name-Brand Pantyhose at Half the Price! Why pay for fancy packaging or that little tag with a famous name on it when you can enjoy cotton lining, reinforced toes, and matchless durability for only $1.99?
Analysis In this excerpt, the price falls right at the end of the paragraph, where it stands out. In addition, the price issue is featured in a bold headline. This technique may even be used as an opening of a letter, if 1) the price is the most important feature, and 2) the audience for the letter is value conscious.
Burying the price If the price is not a major selling point, you can handle it in several ways. You could leave the price out altogether. You could mention it only in an accompanying brochure. You could de-emphasize the price by putting the actual figures in the middle of a paragraph that comes close to the end of your sales letter, well after youve presented the benefits and selling points.
Example for a high end product Only 100 prints of this exclusive, limited edition lithograph will be created. On June 15, they will be made available to the general public, but you can reserve one now for only $350, the special advance reservation price. Simply rush the enclosed reservation card back today so that your order is in before the June 15 reservation date.
Analysis Emphasizing the rarity of the edition signals value and thus prepares the reader for the big-ticket price that follows. The actual price is buried in the middle of a sentence and is tied in with another reminder of the exclusivity of the offer.
Other techniques The pros also use two other techniques for minimizing price. One technique is to break a quantity price into units. Instead of saying that a case of wine costs NTD 4800, you might say that each bottle costs NTD 400.
Technique two The other technique is to compare your products price with some other product or activity: The cost of owning your own spa is less than youd pay for a health club membership. Your aim is to make the cost seem as small and as affordable as possible, thereby eliminating price as a possible objection.
Supporting your Claims You cant assume people will believe what you say about a product just because youve said it in writing. Youll have to prove your claims.
Product claims There are a number of types of support for product claims: Samples Brochures Examples Testimonials Statistics Guarantees
Using the AIDA plan in Sales Messages Most sales letters are prepared according to the AIDA plan used for any persuasive message. You begin with an attention-getting device, generate interest by describing some of the products unique features, increase the desire for the product by highlighting the benefits that are most appealing to your audience, and close by suggesting the action you want the audience to take.
Getting attention: Like other persuasive messages, sales letters start with an attention-getting device, however, the emphasis of the attention phase is slightly different. Sales letter professionals use some common techniques to attract their audiences attention. One popular technique is opening with a provocative question.
Which is best? How would you like to get top grades this semester? Get top grades this semester! Now you can get top grades this semester, with…
Options analysis If youre like most people, youll find the first option most enticing. The question invites your responsea positive response designed to encourage you to read on. The second option is fairly interesting, too, but its commanding tone may make you wary of the claim. The third option is acceptable, but it certainly conveys no sense of excitement. Its quick introduction to the product may lead you to a snap decision against reading further.
Other techniques A piece of genuine news: In the past 60 days, mortgage rates have fallen to a 30-year low! A personal appeal to the readers emotions and values: The only thing worse than paying taxes is paying taxes when you dont have to.
More Your products most attractive feature along with the associated benefit: New control device ends problems with employee pilferage! A sample of the product: Heres your free sample of the New Romalite packing sheet.
More A concrete illustration with story appeal: In 1985 Earl Colbert set out to find a better way to process credit applications. After 10 years of trial and error, he finally developed a procedure so simple and yet thorough that he was cited for service to the industry by the American Creditors Association. A specific trait shared by the audience: Busy executives need another complicated time- saving device like they need a hole in the head.
More A challenge: Dont waste another day wonder how youre going to become the success you always wanted to be. A solution to a problem: Tired of artic air rushing through the cracks in your windows? Stay warn and save energy with StormSeak Weather-stripping.
Building interest Decide what your products central selling point is. This is the single point around to which to build your sales letter.
Central selling point To determine your products central selling point, ask: What does the competition offer? What is special about my product? What are potential buyers really looking for?
Increasing desire To increase desire, expand your main benefit while adding others. Keep in mind that you dont need to provide every last detail as you explain product benefits. The best sales letters are short, preferably no more than one or two pages.
Keep it short Also remember to use bullet points to highlight details whenever possible. You have to assume that your readers are pressed for time and are interested only in what matters most to them.
Motivating action Aim to get the readers to act as soon as possible. Explain clearly how to take the next step. You might want to motivate people with an offer such as the first 500 people to respond get an extra bonus. Other methods to motivate people to act is to give them a free trial period or offer a discount for ordering early.
Strategies for Fundraising Messages Most of the techniques used to write sales letter can also be used to write fundraising letters, as long as your techniques match your audience, your goals, and the cause or organization youre supporting.
Whats in it for me? Be careful to establish value in the minds of your donors. Above all, dont forget to include the whats in it for me? information: for example, telling your readers how good theyll feel by making a donation.
Know your donors To make sure that your fundraising letters outshine the competition, take some time to get ready before you actually start writing. You can begin by reading the letters you receive from donors. Learn as much about them as you possibly can.
Watch the competition You might also keep a file of competing fundraising letters. Study these samples to find out what other fundraisers are doing and what new approaches they are taking.
Focus on your readers Be sure to focus on the concerns of your readers, not on the concerns of your organization. Say something like Your donation of NTD4000 will provide 15 people with a New Years Day dinner.
Personalizing Fundraising Messages Because fundraising letters depend so heavily on emotional appeals, keep your messages personal. A natural, real-life lead in is usually the best. People seem to respond best to slice-of-life stories. Storytelling is perfect when your narrative is unforced and goes straight to the heart of the matter.
Three common mistakes So that your letters remain personal, immediate and effective, steer clear of three common mistakes: Avoid letting your letter sound like a business communication of any kind. Avoid wasting space on warm-up (things you write while youre working up to your argument). Avoid assuming the goals of your organization are more important than your readers concerns (a deadly mistake).
Strengthening Fundraising Messages The best fundraising letters do four things: Explain a specific need thoroughly Show how important it is for readers to help Spell out exactly what amount of help is being requested Describe in detail the benefits of helping.
Fundraising guidelines: Interest your readers immediately Use simple language Give readers an opportunity to accomplish something important Make it hard to say no Make your needs clear Write no longer than you have to Make your reply form complete and thorough Use interesting enclosures
Interest your readers immediately: If you dont catch your readers interest at the absolute beginning of your letter, you never will.
Use simple language: Tell your story with simple, warm, and personal language. Nothing else is as effective in getting people to empathize.
Give readers an opportunity to accomplish something important: Donors want to feel needed. They want the excitement of coming to your rescue.
Make it hard to say no: Make the need so urgent and strong that your readers find it difficult to turn you down. Wont you send a gift now, knowing that childrens lives are on the line?
Make your needs clear: Leave no doubt about the amount of money that you want. Be absolutely clear, and be sure the amount requested is appropriate for your audience. Explain why the money is needed as soon as possible. Also, make it extremely easy to respond by asking for a small gift.
Write no longer than you have to: If you use a telegram-type format, keep your message short. However, longer messages are usually best for fundraising. Just keep sentences and paragraphs short, maximize content, and minimize wordiness.
Make your reply form complete and thorough. Include all the basics: your name, address, and telephone number; a restatement of your request and the gift amount; your donors name and address (or space for a label); information on how to make out the check; information on tax deductibility.
Use interesting enclosures: Enclosures that simply give more information decrease returns. Instead, use enclosures that are fun or that give the donor something to do, sign, return, or keep.