2. Double-decker Paragraphs How to Write an 8-12 Sentence Paragraph A modified Jane Schaeffer paragraph Powerpoint created by Hollie Gustke and modified by Trina Mangione and Sierra Thompson.

3. Get Ready to Color Your World! Materials: When we write our rough draft, we will use blue, red, and green colored pencils. –GREEN is for Commentary (CM). –RED is for Concrete Details (CD). –BLUE is for Topic Sentences (TS) and Concluding Sentences (CS).

4. Step 1: TOPIC SENTENCE A Topic Sentence (TS) is the top bun of a hamburger. TS = first sentence of the paragraph. It shows the main idea. Usually a mildly controversial statement--something that you have to prove.

5. . Example Topic Sentence (TS) 1) In the novel, The Hunger Games, by Suzanne Collins, Katniss is the bravest character. NO NO: NEVER EVER use any form of “ In my opinion ” Ex: I think, I believe, I say, the writer of this paper thinks, etc. Use of these will result in immediate 5% grade decrease.

6. Step 2: Concrete Details Concrete Details are the meat patties of the hamburger. Concrete Details: are the embedded quotes/facts/details that prove your TOPIC SENTENCE In your summer assignment essays, your CD should be an embedded quote.

7. Example Concrete Detail 2) When Prim ’ s name is called at the reaping, Katniss immediately responds by screaming, “ I volunteer! I volunteer as tribute! ” (Collins 22).

8. How to embed quotes in a lit analysis paper: Answer the following questions: 1.Who is saying it: 2.Who are they saying it to 3.What is going on in the story In the previous CD, we know that Katniss says it to the announcer during the reaping. You should never have a quote floating by itself. It should be embedded into a complete sentence.

9. Step 3: Commentary Commentary Sentences are the “ extras ” on the hamburger—the tomato, cheese, lettuce, mayo—they make it delicious! CM= your analysis, interpretation, explanation, or insight into the text.

10. Example Commentary Sentences (2-3 CMs per CD) 3) This shows a natural sense of bravery. 4) Katniss does not even need to think about whether or not she is willing to risk her life for her sister.

11. Step 4: 2 nd Concrete Detail

12. Example Concrete Detail 5) Later in the novel, Katniss is faced with certain death if she goes to the feast at the cornucopia, but despite the threat, she decides to go immediately because “ Peeta is going to die if [she does not] go to that feast ” (Collins 276).

13. Step 5: 2-3 more pieces of Commentary related to 2 nd CD Commentary Sentences are the “ extras ” on the hamburger—the tomato, cheese, lettuce, mayo—they make it delicious! CM= your analysis, interpretation, explanation, or insight into the text.

14. Example Commentary Sentences (2-3 CMs per CD) 6) Katniss is willing to take on four dangerous killers to save the life of a friend. 7) Most people would be afraid to take on such a risk, but Katniss does not even hesitate.

15. Step 4: CONCLUDING SENTENCE A concluding sentence (CS) is the bottom bun of the hamburger. A CS wraps up the paragraph and leaves the reader with something to think about. In an essay with multiple paragraphs, this sentence will transition to the next paragraph.

16. Example Concluding Sentence (CS) 8) Someone who is truly brave, such as Katniss, will risk anything to save the ones they love.

17. Three layers Topic sentence Concrete Detail (hamburger patty) Commentary (lettuce) Commentary (tomato) Concrete Detail (hamburger patty) Commentary (cheese) Commentary (pickles) For an eleven-sentence paragraph, you have three chunks:  Concluding sentence

18. Put it all together…Notice the color pattern: In the novel, The Hunger Games, by Suzanne Collins, Katniss is the bravest character. When Prim ’ s name is called at the reaping, Katniss immediately responds by screaming, “ I volunteer! I volunteer as tribute! ” (Collins 22). This shows a natural sense of bravery. Katniss does not even need to think about whether or not she is to risk her life for her sister. Later in the novel, Katniss is faced with certain death if she goes to the feast at the cornucopia, but despite the threat, she decides to go immediately because “ Peeta is going to die if [she does not] go to that feast ” (Collins 276). Katniss is willing to take on four dangerous killers to save the life of a friend Most people would be afraid to take on such a risk, but Katniss does not even hesitate. Someone who is truly brave, such as Katniss, will risk anything to save the ones they love.

19. Let ’ s try our own!! In “The Most Dangerous Game” by Richard Connell, General Zaroff explains to Rainsford that he wants the ideal animal to hunt, which must have the attributes of an ideal quarry. “It must have courage, cunning, and, above all, it must be able to reason,” declares Zaroff(Connell 12). In a clear and concise 8-12 sentence paragraph, analyze how Rainsford displays one of the three characteristics of the ideal quarry: courage, cunning, or reason.